You worked up to this story very nicely. I would not have liked to see Mrs. Bucket just outwardly forced, but I'm rather enjoying this. I'll admit it, I find Mrs. Bucket attactive. I'm glad Burton is seeing her. You have a good bead on the character, I DID feel like I was in her thoughts, felt natural.
"It had something to do with his smile that never really seemed to reach his eyes." - I love that line, you hit the nail on the head, rather truthful statement! I wish I'd thought of it, but it belongs in your fiction.
Dang, that was a really jerk thing of Wonka to do and yet you can still see a possible innocence in his words vs. actions. I'm like, "Does he KNOW what he's doing or is he honestly just curious?" The dialog was great and her thought were too and I can't get marama_tsg image out of my head; perfect compliment. Now, how are we going to get past the husband problem? Uh..I have a HUSBAND Mr. Wonka, that MEANS something, you don't go about "tasting" and kissing people!
I can't believe how much I want him to do her. Ha! And I thought Charlie couldn't be matched. See, good authors can change your mind. Then again, I like a good non-con. Hey, I hope Charlie gets jealous or maybe he'd like having TWO Daddies. *cracks self up*
Who the hell would want to drink a hot cup of cocoa or read magazines just to pass the time while waiting to be molested?! *laughs to self again* It again points to Wonka really not realizing what the hell he's really doing. The room is uber creepy, what a real switch from the real "Wating Room", nice touch, it's a shape-shifting prison.
Your writing totally makes this fic work.
"It had something to do with his smile that never really seemed to reach his eyes." - I love that line, you hit the nail on the head, rather truthful statement! I wish I'd thought of it, but it belongs in your fiction.
Dang, that was a really jerk thing of Wonka to do and yet you can still see a possible innocence in his words vs. actions. I'm like, "Does he KNOW what he's doing or is he honestly just curious?" The dialog was great and her thought were too and I can't get
I can't believe how much I want him to do her. Ha! And I thought Charlie couldn't be matched. See, good authors can change your mind. Then again, I like a good non-con. Hey, I hope Charlie gets jealous or maybe he'd like having TWO Daddies. *cracks self up*
Who the hell would want to drink a hot cup of cocoa or read magazines just to pass the time while waiting to be molested?! *laughs to self again* It again points to Wonka really not realizing what the hell he's really doing. The room is uber creepy, what a real switch from the real "Wating Room", nice touch, it's a shape-shifting prison.
If you can keep up this tone, do continue.